刀郎新歌己见
菲沙河星光 (2023-07-26 13:25:04) 评论 (1)
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刀郎新歌己见
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即兴创作，两处不满意，改正如下：遮“斑”影改成遮“灯”影更切合舞台之人；“无从”改成“从无”以减少歧意。还有一处舍平仄就意境：凤凰的“凤”是仄声，可是这里本应是平声，无词可换，就此。
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