once the road is formed, people starts to walk on it. i don't mind if someone deviates from it a little. if someone deviated too far from the road, intentionally or unintentionally, he should call his way by a different name.
Certainly the author has the ultimate right to her poems. That is why I am so content with being allowed to make suggestions.
I would like to see more constructive opinions though. People are better at difference aspects.
The majority of WuLv in TangShi didn't have Gong1 Dui4. It was developed overtime and summarized to rules. How much one wants to follow the rules is upto each individual.
Taking Qin4YuanChun1 as another example, many used as examples didn't have the Shan4Zi3Dui4. But some people think you have to have it to be considered Qin4Yuan2Chun1. Jian4 Ren2 Jian4 Zhi4.
It would be better if you aviod 酒 in the sentence since you already have 斟. I remember a sentence from Feng YanSi: Zui4 Li3 Bu Ci2 Jin1 Que4 Man3.
I read someone's change to MengZhongv's setences in her Wu3Lv4. One of the change was to "Qing1 Shan1 Liu2 Fei3 Cui4, Bi4 Shui3 Xi4 YanYang". Do you see it as better? In my opinion those two sentences involve too much of color green. They might present better "Ge2", but no better "Yi4". I wanted to discuss it with others, but decided not.
Thank you for taking my suggestion (I saw that you made change when you posted it on the forum). Actually I also like 侵城 better. 倾城 here is rather static and has been used too much.
