Esoteric
2006-01-06 11:35:06
Esoteric
Mmmmm . . .
The art of eating
the ripened peach,
the fullness of sun & spring
rain . . . thunders in summer
& silent blossoms
of a frosty dawn --
the tongue
finally ceased
to fight the sound
The happiest song
that won’t go wrong
Mmmmm . . .
I see you slowly unfrown,
a joy freshly found
like a particular body ache
reminding you love
is still going strong:
expanding each cell
opening each
forgotten shell
Mmmmm . . .
The body remembers
all the small songs,
frabjous or remorse,
trapped in your heart,
chest and lungs:
Violence of the young
wingless nights
now gently touched
flattened out . . .
Out
Mmmmm . . .
Try to recall the first
river you bathed in, the
first words that burnt
your neck and ears, the
first kiss you were too young
to taste, the first blow of the wind
that broke the sail, the
first . . . the
first . . .
Mmmmm . . .
The O closes
into an almost-smile
Memory unearthing memory
Heart burying heart
Either tethered or ether, like being feathered,
or do you rather
. . . ?
Mmmmm . . .
Let yourself go!
Let your heart breathe, rest
unguarded for a moment.
Forget the million nevers & evers,
‘cause neither will outlast
this voiceless, unmitigated
flow of what deeply
matters, or
does it?
Mmmmm . . .
+
z.z.
2006
知凡 发表评论于
2006-01-09 10:49:52
水滴你的嗓子真好!!! 谢谢分享!!!
我也好喜欢韩红!!! 流行歌手中她应该算是我的“新欢 ”:))) 她的声音天然地牵动人心,自然而柔情。。。
影云 发表评论于
2006-01-08 14:24:40
thanks, i will; when i figure out how to use the software, i will record my mom's songs and share with your guys too :)
yah, i love the "out-of-control" in your voice in the ending; indeed, this song should be more natural, i mean, emotions less controlled by a singer, which is like opening . . . my feeling. . . but i think you sing it very well .
by水滴 发表评论于
2006-01-08 13:37:47
YY: You said that this song is your mom's favorate. Please say hi to her.
The last part is very challenge, almost 2 octave range.
影云 发表评论于
2006-01-08 13:00:53
like this song a lot , especially the ending part . . .
:)
by水滴 发表评论于
2006-01-08 12:29:56
A real life is imperfect.
A real person is imperfect.
A professional has a whole team works for her. She has professional recording instruments. She can sing several times, can cut-paste the best sentences together. Of course, she laways practices each song hundreds times to make it perfect. :)
LTG 发表评论于
2006-01-08 12:06:11
the most challenging song you have ever posted ... [?]
good job!!
i have a couple of albums by Han Hong ... this song is included....
thank you so much for sharing.....
i feel you have more potential to make it higher in the first half...right?
i prefer the imperfect sound quality to the "perfect" ones....
yours is real....home style....:)
by水滴 发表评论于
2006-01-08 10:56:21
伴奏用的是消音版,所以有杂音。
by水滴 发表评论于
2006-01-08 10:20:18
I sang this one about a month ago.
青藏高原
呀啦索哎
是谁带来远古的呼唤
是谁留下千年的祈盼
难道说还有无言的歌
还是那久久不能忘怀的眷恋
哦我看见一座座山一座座山川
一座座山川相连
呀啦索
那可是青藏高原
是谁日夜遥望着蓝天
是谁渴望永久的梦幻
难道说还有赞美的歌
还是那仿佛不能改变的庄严
哦我看见一座座山一座座山川
一座座山川相连
呀啦索
那就是青藏高原
LTG 发表评论于
2006-01-07 23:24:11
enjoy reading both of your versions!!
smooth....your wrod choices are very well-thourght and -paced....!!!
both titles are very intersting...never thought of that myself :)
sexy?
Mmmmm, maybe...:)
i think poems, either sad or happy, should all be sexy!!!
知凡 发表评论于
2006-01-07 19:07:05
"僻径"
嗯嗯嗯嗯 。。。
吃的艺术
熟美的桃
丰盈里阳光和春天的
雨。。。夏日的雷声
霜寒黎明里
默默的花簇
舌头
终于停止
抗争这声音
不会走调的
最快乐歌声
嗯嗯嗯嗯 。。。
我看着你慢慢舒开眉头
新发现的欢愉
如同肉体某个特有的痛
告慰着你 爱
依然在逐渐坚强
舒展每一个细胞
开放每一个
被遗忘的矜持
嗯嗯嗯嗯 。。。
肉体记得
所有细微的歌
愉悦或自责
陷在你的心,
胸和肺:
年轻的狂热
无翼的夜晚
现已轻柔地被触摸
抚平伸展。。。
溢去
嗯嗯嗯嗯 。。。
试着回想第一条
你浴洗的河,
第一句你面红耳赤的话语,
年少未能品味的第一个吻
第一阵吹破你船帆的风
第一次。。。
第一次。。。
嗯嗯嗯嗯 。。。
“O”收合
成一个几乎的微笑
记忆掘着记忆
心埋于心
束紧或天堂
像是带着翅膀
或许你宁愿
。。。?
放开你自己
让心呼吸,
不必设防地歇息一刻
忘掉千百万的“决不”与“始终”
因为任一都不会经久于这
清音的全然的
最深之处
紧要的流淌,
要紧吗?
嗯嗯嗯嗯 。。。
+
很美很性感裹着心与智的一首诗!!!只是我的中文很难翻译出原文的声响和流动的性感。。。
谢谢分享!!!
:)
影云 发表评论于
2006-01-07 18:00:10
那鲜为人知的
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
吃的艺术
熟透的桃,
阳光与春雨的
饱满。。。夏日的滚雷
经霜的黎明里
沉默的绽放 - -
舌
终於停止
与音的抗争
那是一首永不迷途
最快乐的歌
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
我见到你的眉头缓缓舒开,
新近找到的欢乐
如同身体某个特别的痛
让你想起爱
逐日增长:
舒展每一个细胞
打开每一个
被遗忘的贝壳
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
身体能记起
所有细微的歌声
快乐的,悲情的
牢套在你的心,
胸与肺里:
年轻无翼的夜
的疯狂
现在轻轻地被触摸
抚平而流溢
出来。。
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
试图回忆最初
你沐浴过河,最初
燃烧你的颈与耳的话语,最初
因你太年青而无法品味的吻,最初
风破碎船帆的一击,最初
。。。最
初。。。
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
“O”围成
一个微笑
回忆翻耕着回忆
心埋葬着心
无论紧绑,还是冲入云霄,
如同羽翼丰满,
或许你宁愿
。。。?
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
放开自己!
让你的心呼吸,平静
一刻无防。
忘掉千百万的“永不”与“曾经”,
因为没有什么
可以超越
这无声,永不平息
的流淌
来自心灵深处
的流淌,
是不是?
嗯嗯嗯嗯。。。
:
非常非常的美感动。。。深层次的。。。
水滴的感觉还真不错。。。
LTG 发表评论于
2006-01-06 14:49:40
y.y.
yeah, it's about sounds and lungs :)
and how they are made....
s.d.
if you think it's for you, then it's for you :))
cheers everyone!
by水滴 发表评论于
2006-01-06 12:45:31
feel like this one you written for me. :)) only my projective thinking...
影云 发表评论于
2006-01-06 11:46:43
. . .
very beautiful
& joyful,cheerful,imagery . . love
the poem as if falling
into the pond
of sounds
. . .
Esoteric
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Esoteric
Mmmmm . . .
The art of eating
the ripened peach,
the fullness of sun & spring
rain . . . thunders in summer
& silent blossoms
of a frosty dawn --
the tongue
finally ceased
to fight the sound
The happiest song
that won’t go wrong
Mmmmm . . .
I see you slowly unfrown,
a joy freshly found
like a particular body ache
reminding you love
is still going strong:
expanding each cell
opening each
forgotten shell
Mmmmm . . .
The body remembers
all the small songs,
frabjous or remorse,
trapped in your heart,
chest and lungs:
Violence of the young
wingless nights
now gently touched
flattened out . . .
Out
Mmmmm . . .
Try to recall the first
river you bathed in, the
first words that burnt
your neck and ears, the
first kiss you were too young
to taste, the first blow of the wind
that broke the sail, the
first . . . the
first . . .
Mmmmm . . .
The O closes
into an almost-smile
Memory unearthing memory
Heart burying heart
Either tethered or ether, like being feathered,
or do you rather
. . . ?
Mmmmm . . .
Let yourself go!
Let your heart breathe, rest
unguarded for a moment.
Forget the million nevers & evers,
‘cause neither will outlast
this voiceless, unmitigated
flow of what deeply
matters, or
does it?
Mmmmm . . .
+
z.z.
2006